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A Ron Ficathon where Everyone's a Winner!
Team Gen: Ill Met By Moonlight 3/3 
10th-Mar-2007 02:21 pm
Author: wolfiekins
Team: Gen
Prompt: Food

See Part I for full header and disclaimer


Voting for this story is now closed!
14th-Mar-2007 03:47 am (UTC)
This was an interesting story. I liked the slow buildup, the relationships, the eventual revelation and resolution. I could really see Ron feeling terribly guilty for what happened. There were two things that didn't work for me. The first was Harry/Ron. Though I read Ron as straight straight I'm willing to suspend by disbelief for triatha_ron, and I'm not anti-slash nor am I in the gen=asexual camp. But Harry's use of "love" (as well as George, Remus, and Charlie's) just threw me completely out of the story and I can't see him using that term for anybody, really; given how reserved he is in canon I'd need to see a lot more buildup showing how he became more emotionally open with Ron. The second thing was the complete lack of Hermione. I know the pairing is Ron/Harry but that doesn't mean Hermione couldn't still be one of Ron's close friends and it was odd that she wasn't mentioned once in a fic this long. Is she even alive?

Your original characters were well drawn as well, especially Violet. I think I have a bit of a crush on her, and I liked how good of a friend she was to Ron. The story was well crafted and I found the mood to be suitably creepy, especially the visions Ron was having. The change in tense was well used there.
15th-Mar-2007 12:35 am (UTC)
I'm pleased to hear that the basic structure and premise of the story worked for you. That's satisfying enough, for any author! It's unreasonable to expect that every reader will find any given story to be free of problems, so I can understand totally your issue with the Ron/Harry relationship. For me, though, that's the pairing that works for me, and it tends to colour everything I write. And, in the context of this story, Ron & Harry and George & Remus are involved in very long term relationships, so using 'love' as a term of endearment isn't that far off base. They love each other, and that's just how my characters speak in that context. I'm a number of years past the last novel here, and have taken quite a few liberties with canon as it is...and I won't even go into the relationship between Ron and Charlie at this point!

As for Hermione, in this universe, she didn't survive the War; sorry!

Again though, thanks so much for taking the time to read and share your thoughts! I'm very grateful for it, truly!
14th-Mar-2007 10:38 pm (UTC)
This was such an engrossing read. Very well told. I especially liked how you portrayed Ron's relationship with his brothers. I was also glad to see Harry at the end. I couldn't see him staying away long even if Ron weren't his lover.

So I understand this is part of a larger verse? I'm very interested in checking it out.

Thank you for the effort you put into this, it was well worth it:-)
15th-Mar-2007 12:41 am (UTC)
I'm so pleased to hear that the brotherly aspects of this ring true! That's so important to hear, as I really do adore the Weasley boys. And I debated quite a bit as to whether I should bring Harry in...but, as you read, I relented, and I'm glad I did.

Actually, I did unconsciously write this as a part of a series of mine: STORMFRONT. It's 99% compliant, save for a few little details (the team Harry plays Quidditch for, and where Ron & Harry live). The links to the other stories are on my LJ, and they all can pretty much stand alone...

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and to leave such lovely comments! I appreciate it very much!
16th-Mar-2007 01:44 am (UTC)
This was quite an interesting story. I like how you didn't just overlook the fact that several people were killed. Charlie was great in this.

Well done.
16th-Mar-2007 11:38 am (UTC)
Thank you. I'm pleased you enjoyed the story.
19th-Mar-2007 11:20 pm (UTC)
First let me say, great job! Intriguing plot line, well developed characters, amusing brotherly interations. Great job all around. Now I have a question.

Chap 1
It was PTSD, no doubt about it.
Chap 2
"I should say that the PTSD is what triggered Ron's condition. "

Ok so I know I am being to involved here. I can see how in chapter three the whole on trial for murder thing over shadows everything else but . . . does he still have PTSD? Or did that disappear with the "brain trauma"? 'Cause I really don't want him to be a squib! He's been through so much already!
7th-Jul-2007 03:16 am (UTC)
Oh, damn...apologies for the lateness of this response...I thought I was monitoring this post...apparently not. First, thanks so much for reading and taking the time to comment. I mentioned the PTSD so that Ron and most everyone else would simply believe that was the underlying problem. So yes, he's still suffering from PTSD on top of everything else...

Again, thanks so much for reading!
26th-Mar-2007 02:17 pm (UTC) - Team Gen: Ill Met By Moonlight 3/3
I love the relationship the Weasley's have here. Seems very real.

“Spare the wand, spoil the child,” Charlie replied with a slight grin. LOL, I just love this scene. Very Weasley.

The last part was kind of erie, what with Ron killing short dark haired blokes, but still...Excellent, and one of your best pieces.

7th-Jul-2007 03:12 am (UTC) - Re: Team Gen: Ill Met By Moonlight 3/3
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
31st-Mar-2007 01:47 am (UTC)
Erm ... here via a rec, but ... I can't squee like everyone else, I'm afraid. Sorry and all that!

The basic plot is intriguing, and those brains are well worth revisiting as the basis for a story like this. It's quite a horrible situation for Ron to find himself in, especially with the possible 'blending' idea at the end (echoes of werewolf stories there, so Remus might sympathise).

Things appeared rather rushed through at times, though, with (to me) the characters seeming to recite what was happening rather than just doing it onscreen? There seemed to be a number of loose ends at the conclusion, too (such as what Remus said to Percy, how it was going to play out in the papers, how Harry was going to react to all this, what the snakes were about and how Ron was speaking Parseltongue).

I gather from other reviews that the background details are based on a ficverse from another story of yours? I didn't quite get the ambric signatures, which were described early on as reflecting a person's magic but seemed to be their general personality through most of the fic? There were a lot of minor details about the background to the world which jarred for me -- the Healing procedures and so on seemed very Muggle for want to a better word -- but that may just be me.

As for the characters themselves - well, early on it was obvious I'd just have to shrug my shoulders and assume they were gay, but even with that assumption made they still didn't seem much like their book counterparts -- in fact they all seemed very similar to each other. There were several cases where their reactions seemed oddly unrealistic -- e.g. considering the idea that Ron could conceivably keep his job at St Mungo's.

Sorry to be as critical as this, but ... you know, I kept stumbling over a lot of things which just didn't work for me and threw me out of the story. :)
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