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Team Het: Five Days in August 
14th-Mar-2007 11:50 am
triatharon
Story Title: Five Days in August
Author name:thetreacletart
Team: Het
Prompt: Summer
Rating: R
Pairing: Ron/Pansy
Warnings: Fic might result in silly grins and the occasional chortle. Or, perhaps, make you want to slap me. It's all good.
Length: 6,268 words
Summary: Ron tries to find a way to escape the excessive heat and Pansy Parkinson. Not necessarily in that order.
Author notes: Many thanks to attilatehbunand tehgiantsquid for all their help. Any remaining errors belong to me.

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Comments 
17th-Mar-2007 09:00 am (UTC) - Bravisimo
You sultry minx, continually tempting us "strictly cannon" folks over to the dark side with your never-in-a-million-years parings!

All the perfect elements of a good Tart fic, snark, angst, lovely prose, and turning a prompt absolutely on it's head and finding magic inside. Wonderful stuff.

Ron squirmed uneasily in his seat. Mostly because she was sitting too close talking about his mother and blowjobs in the same conversation, which should never - never - happen.

Bwahahahahahaha!

She couldn't quite meet his eyes. "What if it isn't?" she said softly.

*le sigh* Lovely bit of writing.

"You're mad," she squealed when he finally put her down. "Absolutely barking mad."

"I am," he proclaimed happily. "It's a lovely place to be. Care to join me for a bit?"


I swear I'm not a hopeless romantic, but I love that line.

Brilliant, as always.
18th-Mar-2007 11:45 pm (UTC) - Re: Bravisimo
Would it be creepy to say I love you? :o)

Thank you so much for such a generous and lovely review. It makes all the work I put into these things worth it.

*big hug*
17th-Mar-2007 07:56 pm (UTC)
I just plain adored this! Ron/Pansy always has potential, but this is among my favourites of the pairing I've read so far. I loved how she has a very distinct and vivid and... independent personality even filtered through Ron's perspective. She made me grin like mad here :).

And Ron was just delicious, with his succumbing to the delight of 'girly drinks' (in every way possible, *grin*) and then pretty much equally succumbing to Pansy. A brilliant, in character and still extremely self-ironic inner voice - there's honestly only one other fic in this fest that hit the *voice* as perfectly (or whatever goes for Ron-voice-authenticity in my little brain) – not just perfect characterisation, but perfect *tone*... no idea if that makes sense :).

I also loved your depiction of extreme summer heat at the beginning (and the rain at the end – ideal frame for the story!). Great use of the prompt there, and just reading it made me feel hot too (and left me with a vague craving for banana daiquiri even though I never had one...). And the lovely details, like Ginny and Harry 'canoodling' under the table :).

But the truly fun twist was having Pansy turn the tables on Ron, and making *him* chase her after his first disappearance. The ending was very lovely. I enjoyed this immensely – thanks so much for writing!
18th-Mar-2007 11:57 pm (UTC)
You've left some of the most thoughtful and insightful reviews of this fest and I will be really shallow and admit that I've given them covetous glances. Needless to say, when when I saw your name pop up I squee'd.

Thank you for such generous feedback. It's gratifying to know that the little bits and pieces that I've put into this came came through and have had the desired effect. Your comments on my Ron "voice" where especially wonderful.

Thanks again.

18th-Mar-2007 03:16 am (UTC)
This was wonderful! There were so many lines that made me giggle, and the conversations (and smut) between Ron and Pansy were great. However, I think the end was what really got me, with Pansy letting down her guard and Ron responding. And kissing in the rain is always romantic. Truly, a lovely read!
18th-Mar-2007 11:58 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

I've always wanted to write this pairing and it makes me so happy to know it was well received. Thanks again for your lovely comments.
18th-Mar-2007 07:07 pm (UTC)
This was just lovely! I loved Ron's self-talk, and everyone's fixation on balls and the deluge of rain at the end. It's so true how natural events can bring people out of their shells. Nice job!
19th-Mar-2007 12:04 am (UTC)
Thank you! I really had fun with fic and I'm thrilled that you enjoyed it.
18th-Mar-2007 07:53 pm (UTC)
Love your dim but getting there Ron, loved the singin' in the rain end and of course the wizarding world caused the Ice Age!
19th-Mar-2007 12:05 am (UTC)
Thank you so much. "Dim but getting there Ron" is my favorite Ron of all and I'm glad you liked him as well. :o)
19th-Mar-2007 01:26 am (UTC)
I'll just admit it. I hate Ron. seriously hate him. Yet, you make him extremely likable in this fic, and I really, really love this. You have captured me. XD
19th-Mar-2007 01:30 am (UTC)
It's incredibly gratifying to know that I could convert a Ron hater - if only for one fic. :oD

Thanks for giving it a try.
21st-Mar-2007 08:38 am (UTC) - Five Days in August
Heee! This was great. My personal out-loud-giggle moment was,

Ron remembered quite clearly when he stopped thinking of girls as nothing more than just squishy boys that didn't like to get dirty.


;D

Great fic! and, Mmm, daquiris!
21st-Mar-2007 01:19 pm (UTC) - Re: Five Days in August
Thank you so much. I actually struggled with that particular sentence until I finally settled on 'squishy' as the appropriate adjective. I'm thrilled it worked out. :o)
21st-Mar-2007 08:23 pm (UTC) - He may not be flowery but he sure has a way with words ...
I adored Ron's banana flavored shame and the way she teases him despite thier polar natures. I loved the face off when neither could admmit how much they cared.

But "When Not-Pansy put her hand one thigh while Arse-Grabber put his hand on the other," I realized this might need to be a sequal in a different (not Het Team) moment . . . LOL

21st-Mar-2007 08:50 pm (UTC) - Re: He may not be flowery but he sure has a way with words ...
The Further Adventures of Not-Pansy and Arse-Grabber is pretty catchy. :oD

Thanks so much for stopping by. I was proud of this fic and I'm thrilled you enjoyed it.
24th-Mar-2007 08:20 pm (UTC)
It's been a while since it was posted, but this is the one that sticks in my mind from the triatha_ron. Amusing and tense and prickly as Ron/Pansy so often is, and nicely balanced between the smut and the amusing situations and the characterization.
29th-Mar-2007 01:19 am (UTC)
Thank you so much. I was fond of this fic so I'm thrilled you like it.
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